JonB wrote:Just to say, I have read your piece, Tin. I don't really know about kids' books so there's not much I can say - I'm sure it's well targeted at a specific age group and the language level is appropriate, but I wouldn't know. I thought maybe the girl should've removed the rabbit from the room with the tiger though, perhaps transferred it to her room. Also I wondered if it was going to take a dark turn when Dad's temper was mentioned (which could be fine if it was for a slightly older crowd), but that's probably just me.
It depends what you want them to do later on, and how you envisage them as people. What would a relationship between tiger-man and bear-woman be like? I'm not sure a rabbit is necessarily a bad idea though, just needs more fleshing out. And if it was a rabbit, I'd expect the girl to be more concerned for its safety.tin_robot wrote:As for the rabbit. Yeah. I'm not happy with the rabbit in general. Dad = tiger was a really clear decision. I agonised over the Mum for ages, ultimately settled on a rabbit (after dismissing meerkats, bees, all sorts), and then almost instantly regretted it. If nothing else, it doesn't really work with what I have planned for them in the future. So I may go in completely the opposite direction and make her a bear...
Cheeky bump. If you don't have anything written, that's cool. Somebody next in line might have something to share.tigerswiftly wrote:@aaroncupboard & @revelthedog up next.
Djornson wrote:Hello. I've been sporadically writing for 10 years. I've ocassionally shown a couple of bits to my brother but nobody else. I'm kind of terrified of sharing. How can you be so brave?
Tempy wrote:A whole novel? Christ. I can barely sit through w few thousand of my own words before I want to give up. Kudos.
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